A squeal and a jump
Quick shuffling to the door
Always on cue
As the chime hits its shrill notes four
A sparkle
A widening to a grin
Loaded
The man scoops his adorable win
Porcelain arms
Chain the bronze neck
Hugs and kisses all around
With no one to keep it in check
Eyes mirror the love
When joy takes on a different hue
It seems sweet and simple
When you hear a “Daddy I love you”!
You would have written a much better poem had you not tried to rhyme it. Its good, but it could have been better.
Did you ever read Pablo Neruda. Impure Poetry its called.
very sweet
need to catch up- lot of posts i have missed
artnavy – you’ve been busy 🙂 Thanks – this was one of those moments that happens every evening, but somehow 2 days ago, it touched me dearly.
WH – Pablo Neruda is an amazing guy. I was a huge fan while in school, still enjoy his works. This verse was meant to be fun nothing on the lines of good poetry as I used to once pen.
btw, am old fashioned, I like a rhyme in a poem – especially when I write it. 🙂
very sweet. and same pinch on “I like a rhyme in a poem – especially when I write it.” 🙂
balaji – am sure it has something to do with your little K as well. You know, our daughters share the same name? 🙂
rhyme’s a rhyme a rhyme rt? :))
Thanks rads. I am no expert but I think thats a good bit of poetry. I read it out aloud to my roomie and he noded his head. That means its good! I havent got a nod from him this last 1 year. So there you go!
That was lovely !
hahahaha. Please tell your roomie am honored with his nod! :))
hello hello,
didn’t realise you were bac and that too with so many posts…..i like the poem! (i could never write one for the life of me!)
Cute one!
Creativity comes from the heart. Whatever feels right to oneself, is.
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Even though I don’t understand poetry, despite having studied it for three years, I liked this verse for its simplicity and transparency.
And the scenario repeats itself in homes across the globe 🙂
Thanks Muni, orchid and Terri. Thats awfully nice of you 🙂
i like to rhyme poems too. but it certainly takes away a lot of the original expression when you move yourself into the rhyme groove.
but yes, sometimes it naturally falls into place, and then, is pure joy!
awww i like the tag ‘munchkin’ 😀 how old is munchkin tho? im not a fan of rhyme but each to his own.