An entry to the Totally Optional prompts. You may visit here for a short introduction to this piece on my other blog.
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au·bade
1. A song or instrumental composition concerning, accompanying, or evoking daybreak.
2. A poem or song of or about lovers separating at dawn.
[Origin: Late 17th century, French, from Old French albade, from Old Provençal albada, from alba, dawn, aubade, from Latin.]
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Stay.
Stay
Just a bit longer, stay
I want to kiss you once more
The night as a witness to our desire
Hush,
Close your eyes,
Can you feel me?
Like I did just hours ago
In the silence of the darkness
Your breath as my beacon
I caress you with my fingertips
Stay
Just a bit longer
Make love to me once more
Brushing wavy tendrils away
Your stubble grazes my chin
A passion on a sway
Yet again
Your lips cradled in mine
In the crescendo of our heartbeats
Your voice as my refuge
I echo you with my eyes
Stay
Just a bit longer, stay
I want to kiss you once more
The night’s growing old
Dawn’s stealing quietly through
My spine feels a cold
Hold on, don’t let go
In the warmth of this raging amour
My dream as my anchor
I shut my eyes tight
As you must know
I wake with the dawn,
Poof!
There you go.
Stay
Just a bit longer
Make love to me once more
Rads, I *do* love the way you subtly word even the raunchiest of emotions – in a completely non-tacky and sweet way – you do have a gift with words (at the risk of repeating myself!)
Very well written!
*shudder* Almost real! 🙂
-g
gauri: 'almost' being the key word eh? 🙂
naren: 🙂
Shreya: Dear girl, thanks for repeating, I could use that! 🙂 Not sure about how much of a gift this is…
Enjoyed very much your archives. Your words flow just as others have mentioned.
This poem is cleverly done with metaphors placed where one usually does not see. Can I ask you to explain certain lines and how you meant them? Unsure about the usage of “beacon” and “echo with eyes” phrases. I hope you don’t mind me asking.
K
Kiran: I apologise. Your comment got into 'spam' I rescued it and approved, but yet I don't see it. Now I've lost it completely. In any case, here's your clarification you asked.
"Your breath as my beacon" – Beacon is a shining light cutting through fog. Light is heat, warmth. I hope that was clearer?
"I echo you with my eyes" – as in what she sees in his eyes, she echos it, reflects it. I could've used 'mirror' but I liked this. It has a literal and figurative meaning to it.
Hope that helped? Thanks for your kind words. 🙂
i may be requoting shreya here, but then fantastic wordplay!
Thanks Max. Words give so much of freedom to explore.
Sigh
Its beautiful 🙂 And bookmarked.
Very nicely written..sensual
Trust the French to come up with something like this…
Trust you do do a good job at it :-))) Excellent !!!
Almost dreamlike, but a very realistic scenario.
Yeah, I meant it as a dream. An aubade of a woman asking her lover not to leave in her dream.
The night is never long enough…
🙂 Thanks for commenting.
Elemental..
enthrall
Gautami, enthrall is good. Thanks for commenting.
This sung itself to me..
If it were set to tune, I'd play it..you know when. 🙂
aw CW. 🙂 Doing well?
The nights that end so soon… Good capture…
They sure do. Thank you.
Okay, I'm going to take a cold shower, now!
Great job evoking the love!
Thanks Linda. 🙂
The French are a fine lot aren't they? Thanks, that's a huge compliment. 🙂
Thank you Ofira. I liked yours too! 🙂
🙂
Thatsall? Sigh? 🙂
This is plain AWESOME!! U have a briliant poet in u apart from the engrossing story-teller! (I said the same thing on 'tenneling thru' too! So excuse me for repeating myself!) 🙂
Stitha: lol, I'll interpret it as that you're speechless and stuck on the same line? 🙂 Thanks, am meddling around with words and thoughts..
Four days early, and not feeble. 🙂 Good one
bpsk! It's soooooo good to hear from you! 🙂
Why not start poetry than short stories??? 🙂
lol, too early Praveen 🙂
Very lovely. Going to set it to music? I *love* the refrain – it makes the aubade.
Wouldn't be a bad idea to set it to music right? Would you? 🙂
ah a beautiful way of describing a wet dream 🙂
but seriously – ur a great writer. this poem is awesome! i totally go with the very first comment 🙂